Wednesday, 5 November 2014

    Synopsis Draft 2 Feedback


    ·         Positive(s) about the “World”

    o   Metaphorical job of the park being where people come to meet

    ·         Negative(s) about the “World”

    o   Take the whole of the beginning part out

    Use a setting included a stream (stream equals loneliness)

    Loneliness is communicated by the environment

    Also enriching experience of shooting by a stream

    Include “Voyeurism”

    ·         Sense of detachment, but he doesn’t have purpose – what is he doing there, before he sees the girl?

    ·         Raise the stakes with the girl before he makes contact with her

    o   He watches her for a while, we don’t necessarily see him in a good way, but we see the film through him

    o   Comes off as a bit of a “perv” – yet we get to know him more and understand him

    o   He’s watching her, but does he go further? Does he go nearer?

    o   That’s how he’s used to dealing with people; unable to have contact

    o   He’s watching her, I’m watching him, audience is watching me

    o   Camera within a camera, (making a film about a film?)

    o   Have her do something more than drinking (an overdose?)

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    Watch: Krzysztof Kieslowski – “A Short Film About Love” KROTKI FILM O MILOSCI caly film

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