Media Synopsis Draft 1 Feedback
His
dilemma is not clear enough (what is happening in the frame?)
Show
moment of non-isolation
At
beginning he sees couples around him
E.g.
maybe an older woman who isn't lonely, is sophisticated
What is
it that brings them into contact - he gets a contact he never has - and loses
it - the audience then emphasises his situation.
Make it
more one person's story, and work with that storyline
Work with
visual ways of introducing the audience to that interior situation
Lack of
clear dilemma/predicament
Maybe
she's beautiful but an alcoholic
There is
something that builds up hope, but also builds tension in his situation
with this woman
Want/need/obligation
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