Script Draft 3 Evaluation

Refer to the characters in higher case context. For example, instead of "woman", type "WOMAN". This identifies the character's actions/roles/movements clearly on the pages of the script.

Expand upon your ending; create a more meaningful climax.

Possible idea for a new ending:

• Have the WOMAN record him on her phone, and signal for the MAN to enter the stream. Have him obey her, whilst his camera is still recording; he is unaware of this! He enters, and they exchange wording, leading to her expressing an emotive action towards him; a kiss, hug, etc. She does so whilst acknowledging the camera, before leaving. The MAN realizes everything that happened was filmed, and feels pride at connecting with the WOMAN, and also successfully creating a film (he was making a film himself! This interlinks with him filming the streams/trees earlier).

As the director, you are now filming a film within a film.